Soul of the Phantom

It was a nicing filling bit of background, but it really did not grab my attention. I only thing that kept me reading it was that it was short. I ...

I agree with Firestar. One of the most touching stories I have read in a long time. You flushed out the character of a supposed all-powerful angel, and showed even ...

I did not see any right not grammer or spelling issues, so I will straight on to the story. Well, all I can say really is that I'm confused. It ...

W00T more X-Play viewers! It was quite funny, worthy of the real show itself, but I had a one problem. One is that it would be hard for other readers ...

Very nice beginning, I did not see any grammer or spelling mistakes, and it kept my attention the whole time. Then you ended it at a cliffhanger! I curse thee! ...

Actaully I kinda liked the cheesey beginning, it reminded me somewhat like the opening of a Walt Disney movie. Expect it seems like there is no going to be no ...

Entertaining beginning, but this is what I noticed wrong: With this power we began unstoppable. 'Began' is an odd word to use for this snetience. Perhaps you should rewrite it ...

Quite an interesting tale you are spinning. Something that bothered me was that the Messiah was awake when he was dieing, I belive most patients that near death were put ...

Interesting subject, but more would be useful for exaiming the character closer. I mean she did nothing while her father murdered. I have nothing to say when exaiming the story ...

It was a pretty funny, mainly around about the Burger Monster subject. I don't know if you were going to be funny or not, I just found it to be ...

First I must say... HALO! ...How with that behind us I must say it was okay, but it was not filled with tha much actually. If you add more to ...

The story also seemed rushed too me. I did not feel that sad when they died, I barely knew them as characters, so I really didn't care for them. Maybe ...

Was pretty good. Though there was the whole 'block-o-text' fighting against you, so it was a chore to read through. Also paragraphs would be nice, seperate the writing a bit. ...

There's a lot of spelling mistakes, even my untrained eye can see, let me see if I can help. Seems like you have trouble capitalizing your characters names, which confusion's ...

This story confused me a bit. First of all the story started a bit to slow for me. And did not really catch my attention. You droned on a bit ...